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    October 08, 2010

    Wonder Woman Pt 5

    The sterile smell of the hospital made Alyssa queasy…all of the activity in Trey’s room just made her worry and blame herself. The doctor kept brushing past her, ignoring her cries for information. The Police took Brittany away at the scene and Alyssa was left, alone, in a waiting room…

    DR: Are you the one who came in with Tremaine on the ride over in the Ambulance

    A: Yes..Is everything Ok? Is  Trey going to be Ok?

    DR: Can I have your name please

    A: Alyssa

    DR: Ok..Alyssa, I need you to calm down ok…I am going to need a lot of information in a very short amount of time so that I can take care of him.

    A: I called his Mom…His mom is coming

    DR: Good…What is your relationship with Tremaine?

    A: I'm...well, I was his girlfriend

    DR: I’ll keep this short because there is really not much you can do for him right now… Tremaine, as you know, was hit by a car and has lost a great deal of blood. He is also bleeding internally and we are having trouble locating the bleed because his body is having a hard time stabilizing….We will need someone to sign consent forms and act on his behalf because he can not speak so when his Mother gets here…send her to me right away.

    A: Ok…but what if she takes a while to get here?

    DR: Let’s just hope that she doesn’t…

    The Doctor turned and headed back into the room where they were keeping Trey and Alyssa followed…peeking through the window she saw him, lying still with his eyes closed… hearing what sounded like her name in the distance…Alyssa took her eyes off of Trey and saw his mother asking everyone she passed if their name was Alyssa…the worried look on her face said it all…Once they made eye contact Alyssa waved her over…

    MS (For Momma Songz J): Alyssa?

    A: Hi...

    MS: What happened? Where is my son?

    A: The doctors have him in there (Pointing to the room)

    MS: (Looking through the window)…NOT MY BABY!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO HIM!!! WHAT HAPPENED!!!

    A: I…I am so…so..Sorry

    MS: Where is the Doctor…HE needs a Doctor!!!

    A: The doctor just walked out of his room when you came…he was looking for you…I’m sure he’ll be back

    MS: Did he tell you what happened? Did he tell you What’s wrong?

    A: Trey….Trey got hit by a car

    MS: WHAT? How did this happen?

    A: He…He has lost a lot of blood…

    MS: It’s ok baby…at least you were there for him…got him some help…

    A: This is all my fault!!!

    MS:  How is this your fault?…You were not driving the car…

    A: Brittany was trying to hit me but Trey pushed me out of the way…

    MS: (thinking to herself) Brittany? Brittany??

    A: Yeah…that Brittany…

    MS: How do you know her…I haven’t seen her in years…why was she trying to hit you with her car?

    A: Brittany and I did some fundraising and charity work together…she never really got over Trey and when she saw me talkin to him she kind of lost it…It’s really a long story…

    MS: Well…Whatever it is has my baby in here fighting for his life…I want to know every detail… the way this doctor movin’ I will have all day to hear it to so start from the beginning…

    Before Alyssa could speak Trey’s mother noticed Trey’s brother Forest rushing toward them.

    F: Momma…Is he alright?

    MS: I don’t know…I’m still waitin’ on the Doctor…This is Alyssa…Trey’s girlfriend

    F: Really…you look like you took a bump on the head yourself

    A: I’ll be ok…just worried about Trey

    MS: My son Loves you and now I can see why…you care about him so much…Don’t worry…He’ll be fine…HE has to be… IS that the doctor?

    Trey’s mother rushed to the doctor just before he entered Trey’s room. Alyssa went to follow before forest stuck his arm out in front of her stopping her in her tracks…

    F: You got a minute?

    A: I really want to see if Trey is going to be ok…

    F: I think you need to let my mom handle that and step over here so we can talk in private…

    Alyssa followed Forest to a quiet sitting area around the corner from Trey’s room.

    F: What are you doing here?

    A: I’m trying to make sure your brother is going to be ok…

    F: Oh…my bad…I thought you didn’t really care since you were only using him anyway…

    Alyssa took a deep breath and turned away…Forest knew...and if he was anything like his brother he wasn’t gonna hear her either.

    F: Didn't know that I knew all about you did you?? Why won’t you look at me? You don’t have anything to say??

    A: I have plenty to say…

    F: Look…You have the floor…I want to hear this cuz the last time I talked to my brother his heart was broken…

    A: Ok…but it’s a long story…

    F: Really? Well go ‘head…start from the beginning and don’t leave anything out!

    (Mean While)

    Trey’s mom sat by his bedside studying his injuries.

    MS: How did you get yourself into this one Trey? The doctors are really worried about you…they can’t take you into surgery until you stabilize…(Smiles)…I don’t know why they expect your body to ever calm down…they just don’t know you like I do..Mr. Workaholic.

    A slight tap on the door pulled her out of her thoughts as she got up to see a police man waving for her to step out of the room…

    MS: I will b back Trey (Walks into hallway)

    P: I’m sorry…I know this has been a really hard day for you but I wanted to try and answer any questions you had about the accident

    MS: were you there?

    P: Yes Ma’m… I was the first officer on the scene…

    MS: Where is Brittany?

    P: She is here in the hospital for now getting a full psychological work up…

    MS: Can I see her?

    P: Ma’m that is really not recommended and is highly unusual in a case like this one…

    MS: Where is she? I want to see her….Am I not allowed?

    P: Ma’m… again…it is highly unusual

    MS: first of all…please stop calling me m’am…second, that is my Son in there… tell me where I can find her because I need to speak with her

    P: I will have to escort you…

    MS: Well then be my guest

    Without hesitation the Officer led Trey’s mom to the room where Brittany was being held. She knocked softly before entering only to see Brittany sitting on the floor crying her eyes out.

    MS: Britt? What happened?

    B: IS Trey Ok? Please tell me Trey is ok? This is all my fault…I wasn’t thinking…I…

    MS: Britt…I asked you a question. What happened? Why were you driving like that?

    B: I love Trey so much…You know that? I’ve always loved him…please tell me he is going to be ok…

    MS: Little girl…If you don’t answer my question…we are going to have a problem!

    B: But what about Trey?

    MS: You really want to know how Trey is doing? HUH?! HUH?!...(Moves toward her) He’s laying in a hospital bed with tubes everywhere and he can’t even open his eyes!! Tell me Why you hit him…Tell me now!

    B: I just wanted a baby…

    MS: (Reaches out to snatch her up but is held back by the officer) You must think I’m playin!

    P: I think it’s time to leave…

     

    (Back to Forest and Alyssa)

    F: That is some crazy shit…

    A: I know… Told you it was a long story…

    F: So…Why did you go along with this crazy plan anyway?

    A: My mom…

    F: Your mom?

    A: Yeah…She was in the hospital for a while and I was havin’ a hard time payin her bills…I didn’t know Trey and all Brittany wanted was for me to break his heart…when she came up with this whole sperm stealin’ thing I knew I couldn’t go through with it…

    F: Why didn’t you just tell Trey?

    A: I wanted to…but me and Trey…We were always so happy, you know? I didn’t want to mess things up…by the time I realized I had to come clean I was too late…

    F: You really care about him huh?

    A: Yeah, now he might not wake up because of me…

    F: Don’t blame this all on yourself…Lets go check on him…

    (Trey’s Room)

    DR: We are finally ready to take him in to surgery and stop the internal bleeding…

    F: Is he going to be ok

    DR: We really won’t know until we look inside…The surgery could take hours so If you want to go home and come back…

    F: Naw… We cool on that…we gon’ wait right here

    A: Can I sit with him for a second?

    Dr: Make it quick…We have to get him up there as soon as possible

    F: I’m going to go find mom and let her know…

    Alyssa was left alone with Trey…Sitting next to him she gripped his hand and smiled even though the tears were still welling up in her eyes…

    A: Be strong Trey…You have a lot of work to do…I’m so sorry I put you here…my stupid lies put you in this bed…I’m going to be right here until you wake up…

    Trey’s eyes started to flutter and opened slowly…once the room became clear he saw Alyssa’s smile and felt her familiar touch as she rubbed her hands up and down on his arm…He wanted to speak but couldn’t so he gave her hand a squeeze to let her know that he could hear her…

    (Forest and Trey’s Mom walk in)

    A: He just opened his eyes…

    MS: Mommas here baby…you be strong for me now…

    F: He’ll be fine…We’ll see you when you get out of surgery bruh…

    (Dr. Enters)

    DR: Welcome back Mr. Neverson…I know you are probably in a lot of pain but we will be taking you in to surgery now…

     

    I got to stop it here…looks like Trey might just make it…don’t think Alyssa is gonna get off light…Momma Songz still doesn’t know her part in this…Do you think Trey can forgive Alyssa?? Do you think they can really be together after all of this Drama?? And Brittney still hasn’t been able to really tell her side of the story…she might be crazy but she has feelings too…look for her and Forest to come eye to eye in Pt. 6….Once again..I really want to thank all of yall for supportin’ this one… I want yall to vote on your favorite part in the comment section and the one that wins is the one I am gon’ tweet to Trey this weekend…we want to get him hooked so that he’ll read the whole thing…what’s your pick?? Also, once this story is concluded I will be starting another one for the FREAKS!!! LOL!!! What should I name it…Shake Dat Beast or TreyGasm??J Love yall…I do this for yall!!!

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@LadyAJ03's picture
on Oct 8, 2010 - 08:55PM

Wonder Woman Pt 5

The sterile smell of the hospital made Alyssa queasy…all of the activity in Trey’s room just made her worry and blame herself. The doctor kept brushing past her, ignoring her cries for information. The Police took Brittany away at the scene and Alyssa was left, alone, in a waiting room…

DR: Are you the one who came in with Tremaine on the ride over in the Ambulance

A: Yes..Is everything Ok? Is  Trey going to be Ok?

DR: Can I have your name please

A: Alyssa

DR: Ok..Alyssa, I need you to calm down ok…I am going to need a lot of information in a very short amount of time so that I can take care of him.

A: I called his Mom…His mom is coming

DR: Good…What is your relationship with Tremaine?

A: I'm...well, I was his girlfriend

DR: I’ll keep this short because there is really not much you can do for him right now… Tremaine, as you know, was hit by a car and has lost a great deal of blood. He is also bleeding internally and we are having trouble locating the bleed because his body is having a hard time stabilizing….We will need someone to sign consent forms and act on his behalf because he can not speak so when his Mother gets here…send her to me right away.

A: Ok…but what if she takes a while to get here?

DR: Let’s just hope that she doesn’t…

The Doctor turned and headed back into the room where they were keeping Trey and Alyssa followed…peeking through the window she saw him, lying still with his eyes closed… hearing what sounded like her name in the distance…Alyssa took her eyes off of Trey and saw his mother asking everyone she passed if their name was Alyssa…the worried look on her face said it all…Once they made eye contact Alyssa waved her over…

MS (For Momma Songz J): Alyssa?

A: Hi...

MS: What happened? Where is my son?

A: The doctors have him in there (Pointing to the room)

MS: (Looking through the window)…NOT MY BABY!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO HIM!!! WHAT HAPPENED!!!

A: I…I am so…so..Sorry

MS: Where is the Doctor…HE needs a Doctor!!!

A: The doctor just walked out of his room when you came…he was looking for you…I’m sure he’ll be back

MS: Did he tell you what happened? Did he tell you What’s wrong?

A: Trey….Trey got hit by a car

MS: WHAT? How did this happen?

A: He…He has lost a lot of blood…

MS: It’s ok baby…at least you were there for him…got him some help…

A: This is all my fault!!!

MS:  How is this your fault?…You were not driving the car…

A: Brittany was trying to hit me but Trey pushed me out of the way…

MS: (thinking to herself) Brittany? Brittany??

A: Yeah…that Brittany…

MS: How do you know her…I haven’t seen her in years…why was she trying to hit you with her car?

A: Brittany and I did some fundraising and charity work together…she never really got over Trey and when she saw me talkin to him she kind of lost it…It’s really a long story…

MS: Well…Whatever it is has my baby in here fighting for his life…I want to know every detail… the way this doctor movin’ I will have all day to hear it to so start from the beginning…

Before Alyssa could speak Trey’s mother noticed Trey’s brother Forest rushing toward them.

F: Momma…Is he alright?

MS: I don’t know…I’m still waitin’ on the Doctor…This is Alyssa…Trey’s girlfriend

F: Really…you look like you took a bump on the head yourself

A: I’ll be ok…just worried about Trey

MS: My son Loves you and now I can see why…you care about him so much…Don’t worry…He’ll be fine…HE has to be… IS that the doctor?

Trey’s mother rushed to the doctor just before he entered Trey’s room. Alyssa went to follow before forest stuck his arm out in front of her stopping her in her tracks…

F: You got a minute?

A: I really want to see if Trey is going to be ok…

F: I think you need to let my mom handle that and step over here so we can talk in private…

Alyssa followed Forest to a quiet sitting area around the corner from Trey’s room.

F: What are you doing here?

A: I’m trying to make sure your brother is going to be ok…

F: Oh…my bad…I thought you didn’t really care since you were only using him anyway…

Alyssa took a deep breath and turned away…Forest knew...and if he was anything like his brother he wasn’t gonna hear her either.

F: Didn't know that I knew all about you did you?? Why won’t you look at me? You don’t have anything to say??

A: I have plenty to say…

F: Look…You have the floor…I want to hear this cuz the last time I talked to my brother his heart was broken…

A: Ok…but it’s a long story…

F: Really? Well go ‘head…start from the beginning and don’t leave anything out!

(Mean While)

Trey’s mom sat by his bedside studying his injuries.

MS: How did you get yourself into this one Trey? The doctors are really worried about you…they can’t take you into surgery until you stabilize…(Smiles)…I don’t know why they expect your body to ever calm down…they just don’t know you like I do..Mr. Workaholic.

A slight tap on the door pulled her out of her thoughts as she got up to see a police man waving for her to step out of the room…

MS: I will b back Trey (Walks into hallway)

P: I’m sorry…I know this has been a really hard day for you but I wanted to try and answer any questions you had about the accident

MS: were you there?

P: Yes Ma’m… I was the first officer on the scene…

MS: Where is Brittany?

P: She is here in the hospital for now getting a full psychological work up…

MS: Can I see her?

P: Ma’m that is really not recommended and is highly unusual in a case like this one…

MS: Where is she? I want to see her….Am I not allowed?

P: Ma’m… again…it is highly unusual

MS: first of all…please stop calling me m’am…second, that is my Son in there… tell me where I can find her because I need to speak with her

P: I will have to escort you…

MS: Well then be my guest

Without hesitation the Officer led Trey’s mom to the room where Brittany was being held. She knocked softly before entering only to see Brittany sitting on the floor crying her eyes out.

MS: Britt? What happened?

B: IS Trey Ok? Please tell me Trey is ok? This is all my fault…I wasn’t thinking…I…

MS: Britt…I asked you a question. What happened? Why were you driving like that?

B: I love Trey so much…You know that? I’ve always loved him…please tell me he is going to be ok…

MS: Little girl…If you don’t answer my question…we are going to have a problem!

B: But what about Trey?

MS: You really want to know how Trey is doing? HUH?! HUH?!...(Moves toward her) He’s laying in a hospital bed with tubes everywhere and he can’t even open his eyes!! Tell me Why you hit him…Tell me now!

B: I just wanted a baby…

MS: (Reaches out to snatch her up but is held back by the officer) You must think I’m playin!

P: I think it’s time to leave…

 

(Back to Forest and Alyssa)

F: That is some crazy shit…

A: I know… Told you it was a long story…

F: So…Why did you go along with this crazy plan anyway?

A: My mom…

F: Your mom?

A: Yeah…She was in the hospital for a while and I was havin’ a hard time payin her bills…I didn’t know Trey and all Brittany wanted was for me to break his heart…when she came up with this whole sperm stealin’ thing I knew I couldn’t go through with it…

F: Why didn’t you just tell Trey?

A: I wanted to…but me and Trey…We were always so happy, you know? I didn’t want to mess things up…by the time I realized I had to come clean I was too late…

F: You really care about him huh?

A: Yeah, now he might not wake up because of me…

F: Don’t blame this all on yourself…Lets go check on him…

(Trey’s Room)

DR: We are finally ready to take him in to surgery and stop the internal bleeding…

F: Is he going to be ok

DR: We really won’t know until we look inside…The surgery could take hours so If you want to go home and come back…

F: Naw… We cool on that…we gon’ wait right here

A: Can I sit with him for a second?

Dr: Make it quick…We have to get him up there as soon as possible

F: I’m going to go find mom and let her know…

Alyssa was left alone with Trey…Sitting next to him she gripped his hand and smiled even though the tears were still welling up in her eyes…

A: Be strong Trey…You have a lot of work to do…I’m so sorry I put you here…my stupid lies put you in this bed…I’m going to be right here until you wake up…

Trey’s eyes started to flutter and opened slowly…once the room became clear he saw Alyssa’s smile and felt her familiar touch as she rubbed her hands up and down on his arm…He wanted to speak but couldn’t so he gave her hand a squeeze to let her know that he could hear her…

(Forest and Trey’s Mom walk in)

A: He just opened his eyes…

MS: Mommas here baby…you be strong for me now…

F: He’ll be fine…We’ll see you when you get out of surgery bruh…

(Dr. Enters)

DR: Welcome back Mr. Neverson…I know you are probably in a lot of pain but we will be taking you in to surgery now…

 

I got to stop it here…looks like Trey might just make it…don’t think Alyssa is gonna get off light…Momma Songz still doesn’t know her part in this…Do you think Trey can forgive Alyssa?? Do you think they can really be together after all of this Drama?? And Brittney still hasn’t been able to really tell her side of the story…she might be crazy but she has feelings too…look for her and Forest to come eye to eye in Pt. 6….Once again..I really want to thank all of yall for supportin’ this one… I want yall to vote on your favorite part in the comment section and the one that wins is the one I am gon’ tweet to Trey this weekend…we want to get him hooked so that he’ll read the whole thing…what’s your pick?? Also, once this story is concluded I will be starting another one for the FREAKS!!! LOL!!! What should I name it…Shake Dat Beast or TreyGasm??J Love yall…I do this for yall!!!

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MsAngione's picture

I'm so behind on the stories, but this was good.

Ajalltheway's picture

Omg that was wow so many emotions flowing but i cant wait 4 the freak i aint a freak i jst wanna read it

TREYSANGELBEAUTY's picture

GURL I HEAR THAT DO YA THANG GURL I FEEL U GOT SOMETHING GOING HERE WITH THIS

Daniel_Shawn's picture

omg i started crying thought he wasnt goin make it smh i'm such a pansy

ForbiddenAngel's picture

I think you should tweet part 2 to him. The name of the next Fan Fiction should be titled Shake Dat Beast. You are doing such a good job!

Niecy_28's picture

This was expectional, and I'm glad Trey made it through. My favorite part was four, and now it's time for Trey to make decisions about his dealings with Alyssa. I'm picking.... drum roll....... TreyGasm. Can't waiting for part six!!!! @NeNe_28

SpiritualAngel's picture

@LadyAJ03 I Think I am going to go with Chapter 2 or 4 I really like 4 because even though he was hurting he didn't think with his head but with his heart and took that chance. You can't help who you fall in love with. Finding true love is not easy you have to listen to what your heart is saying and what God is saying to you and about that person. Your heart and your mind going to always be at war with one another. That's way God alway look at the heart, yuur heart speaks the truth. I am a big romantic when it comes to love. I am sitting here in tear I know it's fiction I can feel Trey and Alyssa Pain. I had to stop reading it. I know it's crazy for me to feel like that, I always been like that it's if I can feel other people hurt. pain, joy. Thank you can't want for part 6.

MsJJBabyee's picture

I have to agree with Tricia , this one was good but i loveeed the others . They had that umph that just had you wanting more and actually putting yourself in Alyssa's shoes and fantasizing hmm hmmm hmmm lol . But great job noneee the less as always i cant wait to read the next oneee!

@LadyAJ03's picture

Just as an update...PT. 6 will be the conclusion of Wonder Woman...expect most of your questions to be answered ( I still might leave yall hangin on some stuff) and I will end this one so that... (Drum Roll Please) TreyGasm can start!!! :p....All of the freaky fans will not want to miss this one...Trey's Beast is the Main character LMAO!!!

@LadyAJ03's picture

@Tricia...I KNEW THAT (About Forrest's name)...I got into a lil battle with one of my friends and went with what she said...will def. correct spelling in pt. 6!! I knew it!!! LOL

Tricia AKA @GimmeUnusual's picture

LMAO @ LadyAJ03. I'm glad you're going to tweet this to Trey. I think the majority's favorite is part 2. That's the one that caught my attention & made me go back and read 1. From there I was addicted...so it definitely started with 2. I can't wait for the rest...do the damn thang! We're proud of you!

BTW...on Trey's tattoo, he's spells Forrest with two R's.

KA-LEE-YA...KALEYIA's picture

ive been waitin for dis all day!!!!! im addicted i cnt stop readin!!!!! n u should name it Treygasm

iLovemesumTREY's picture

ive been waitin for this all day too. lls. i think the 2nd part you should tweet to him . that is the one that got me glued & interested. & U should name it Treygasm :)

trinaa33 WiseAngel's picture

I am going to go with chapter 2 or 4 I can't decide, but I do know you should use TreyGasm as the next stories title. Keep up the good work I can actually see the story I as I read it.

Kikamiko's picture

I love them all but go with Pt.2. Now as far as the next story....I like the Treygasm title!!lmao

Shay - Epiphany Angel's picture

Shake Dat Beast!!! Lmao! Naw I'm playin! I vote for Treygasm cuz Lord knows dats what dat man does to me! lol!

AriellBigg's picture

i just love this whole story. i cant pick one. if yu read it from beginning to here . i promise yu will cry its such a wild story. had me tearin up. lmfao! i LOVE IT

Shay - Epiphany Angel's picture

OMG! Tweet da second story! Dat one got me hooked... And whhhyyyyy does it have to stop here?? Uggghhhh! lol

@LadyAJ03's picture

@Tricia...Love your honesty... I know there is alot that goes on in hospitals that I didn't mention...I didn't want it too be too long so I didn't really go into detail because I want to get on to other things but I see where you are coming from and if I ever do another hospital scene I will take those suggestions into consideration...I kind of disagree with you on the talkin' to other people thing when it comes to Forest..with him seeing alyssa there knowing what he knows...he had to confront her...even close families act crazy when someone is laid up :)... as far as momma songz...yeah I agree she prob woulda stayed every minute she could because she is still kinda in the dark...Again, I love your honesty...don't ever change... I love when PPL keep it 100...You are definately alright with me!!! :)

@Everybody else... Looks Like TreyGasm is in the lead so far...If we are following each other on Twitter DM me some ideas of what you would like to see...I'm thinking about featuring a different girl in each part...not soap opera stuff like this one... :) I really appreciate all of the love on here and all of you have really given me alot of things to think about...writing has always been a passion I have wanted to pursue and your comments really give me positive encouragement and keep me going!!! LOVE ALL OF YOU

Raven RambunctiousAngel's picture

I been Waiting All Day For This!!! Part 5 is my Fav!! MS don't Play No Games When It Comes To Trey!!! I Love that cuz im Sure That How she Really Is!! understanding but can get crazy!!

AngelicTrey's picture

This chapter 5 is even hotter. keep up the good work. Can't wait for chapter 6. Bong!!!!!! Leggo!!!!!!

Tricia AKA @GimmeUnusual's picture

I had to go back & reread them all so I could tell you my favorite one. I actually love part 1 & 2 the best.

I know you want honest feedback, so I will always keep it 100 w/ you. This one I didn't care that much for. I thought it was too many things that really wouldn't happen. Knowing Trey as we do, he is VERY family-oriented. There is no way in the world April Turner & Forrest would've left Trey's side to talk to other people. April would not have been trying to talk to Brittany just yet & Forrest wouldn't be trying to get the scoop from Alyssa. Their hearts & minds would've been totally focused on how Trey was doing. They would've been glued to his side.

Also, having a medical background, the doctor would've asked Alyssa if she was aware of any allergies. Hospitals will also not wait on a family member for consent...their 1st job is to stabilize the patient. So if a life-saving surgery is warranted, they would've taken him immediately for that w/o papers. Once the patient or a designated family member could speak, then that's when the hospital would've taken papers into consideration. That's why their are so many Jane & John Does in a hospital - they come in unconscious w/ no information on them. The hospital is obligated to save them 1st & figure the logistics out later.

So this is just my detailed eyes working. You are a gifted writer and overall I love it all. Plz don't misunderstand me though...I liked part 5, but there were some flaws in it for me. I guess I'm expecting it to be a true to the real Trey & his family as possible and we know how much they love each other.

As for the "Sexy" fan story...TreyGasm sounds good to me. LOL

Love ya hun! XOXO

BossLadySims's picture

I would have to say pt. 2 was my favorite part. Girl, when I read that one I was on edge. That one really leaves you wanting more. I was like, who is Alyssa, and better yet what does she and Brittney have planned? But I like all of them. I have been telling friends about this and they are all like, what happes next? I'm like idk, I gotta wait until tomorrow :-). You're an excellent writer.

Kudos LadyAJ03!!!

lala072 AspecialAngel's picture

I think the whole thing is good. Its hard to pick a section to tweet him,... good luck with that one lol I think it should be names TreyGasm :)

Linz84's picture

OH THIS IS GETTING GOOD!!! I think maybe Trey might forgive her. I like part 5 the best!!!

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